Hi, friends, and welcome back to our series, "On Becoming: The Art and Craft of Personal Storytelling." In this series, we take a close look at personal essays written by real students, talking about why we love them, what makes them work, and how they came to be.

In this episode, we explore an essence objects essay, which is to say an essay that was written about objects in the author's room, each one of which reveals a different aspect of their life. I'm joined by Ali McKeon, an essay coach and program advisor here at College Essay Guy. Ali worked with the student who wrote this essay, so she gives us a behind-the-scenes look at the process of working with this student, how the topic came to be, plus the questions she asked along the way. For those of you who love seeing how things get made, whether it's a great meal, a film scene, or a piece of writing, this episode offers a little window into that process.

Ali McKeon is a writing coach and veteran college admissions essay specialist with a BA in English from Stanford University and MFA from UC Irvine. She is passionate about building her students' confidence in the writing process and developing them into strong self-advocates for their individual learning needs. One of the highlights of her career has been mentoring bright students with learning differences. In addition to teaching, she is an arts entrepreneur, former professional ballet dancer, and mom to a busy toddler.

We hope you enjoy.

Play-by-Play:

1:50 – Who is the student behind the essay, and what stood out about working with her?
4:29 – Ali reads the essay, which we're calling "Tiny Windows into My Being"
9:00 – What ideas inspired the student's writing?
10:35 – What makes an "objects in my room" essay stand out?
12:36 – What is an "essence objects" essay, and how does it connect to the montage essay structure?
13:23 – How did the student decide which objects to include in the opening paragraph?
18:02 – How can students weave accomplishments into an essay without sounding like they're bragging?
20:22 – Why does pairing achievements with curiosity strengthen this paragraph?
22:18 – In what ways does the essay show the student is more than just a STEM student?
26:24 – How does the author reflect on her cultural identities?
30:42 – What led the student to include the migraine story in the essay?
36:50 – What makes this essay's ending so effective?
41:26 – What does Ali enjoy most about working with students on essays?
45:21 – Closing thoughts

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